BUSINESS (original version)

 

BUSINESS

By: JB Murray © Nov 2010

 

 

Her eyes give way

With utter uncertainty

This stale-breath evening

To the dread inside

She closes her eyes

Turns the doorknob

Creaks as it opens

The slithering sound of compromise

She says goodbye to the child inside

His touch so brand new

A foreign regurgitation

She hides the shame for a price

And he’ll leave her

Disheveled and broken

And she’ll curl up

In whispers of who she swore she’d never be

Reviews

[Tony]

Sad write-- emotionally stirring.
"hides the shame for a price"-- this strong phrase can be interpreted in many ways, that definately adds to it's strength.

Makosica