Shine and Spark 😅

RAVIN'S INK prompt- hair... For fun..

Once hair shines more,
Now shines more,
with no more.

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Many hang on the twig,
Sparkling wig,
Oh, evening gig.

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Reviews

[Snow_]

I think your poem actually is not that clear. What did you actually meant by that "with No more" It looks like her hair shines more using no more. I think it looks weird. I think the evening gig is not clearly described too general. I think. Sorry this looks so harsh. If you could tell me why? or your reason I would make sure to increase your rating.

Ps. Changed rating already

[Jeyanthi]

(No more- shines more because of bald...)
Evening gig- people used to wear artificial wig for the party...
The poem is significance of hair for appearance.

[Snow_]

Oh i see thank you. I like it your poem. Plss make sure next time it is that easy to understand thanks.

[Snow_]

or it was intentional

[Snow_]

Was it actually?

[Jeyanthi]

Oh.. thank you..
It's not intentional...
It's in response to group(one of wc group which is active here now)prompt - hair..(RAVIN'S INK). Each week a prompt will be posted for that we have come with a poem and can share our writing in the group... to share and get reviews and also for own creativity
For fun and rhyme...

[Snow_]

all right great

[Aarti Sriram]

Funny as I imagine your poem
Grinning while reading at all your rhyming words jeyanthi , Good!

[Jeyanthi]

Thank you sister 😇😅