No more magic in hands

The Weeping Surgeon- Free verses. Edited grammatical errors with the help of Alf.

She is surrounded with woes,
fears and horror.
All are screaming at her
“Make it stop.”
But her healing powers could not
chase the death enough.
Some calling death over
the unbearable pain.
Her instincts start to fight fighting
against the agony the war created.
Her cleansing fingers trembling
under the oozing blood.
Her heartbeat stops whenever
there is someone’s last dead beat heard.
Her glimpse of hope saving life
fades away before it could form,
seeing the chain reaction of dying soul.
Her once lifesaving work place
now rebuilds into deathbeds.
In this torment, God becomes
the long forgotten word.
All she could see is the lives fleeting under her feet.

Author's Note

A scene from Pearl harbor induces me to write these lines.
For http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/%27PICTURE%27-CONTEST/51366/

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Jeyanthi. This is another lovely poem, even though it is filled with sadness. You write from the heart and this shows through your words. A very haunting piece, but a beautiful read. I have a couple of suggestions to make:

Her heartbeat stops whenever (remove "along" there is no need for that word to be there) . . .
now rebuilds into deathbeds. (remove "is" again, there That also gives just a little more flow to your words.is no need for that word. Love this, alf

[Jeyanthi]

Hi too... thanks for the kind review and supportive suggestions, Alf. :)

[alf]

No problem. Are you happy with the result???

[Jeyanthi]

Yeah, happy indeed. I can get a clear picture now. Thanks once again. :D

[alf]

No problem at all

[Julia Mars]

From tragedy beauty is born. The beauty comes in the form of remembering and changing, peace and harmony. A message we should all carry.

[dw817]

Actually I was thinking of 9-11 reading this, Jeyanthi. Also very tragic. You seem to have taken the emotion of fear and loss into a well-written poem.

Take care ...

[SleeplessVolcano]

You desribed the agony of death and war aptly! I enjoyed the movie too, and movie or music inspired poetry is my favourite! :)

[Jeyanthi]

Thanks you so much for stopping by. :)