Romantic apprehension on selection

On seeing the door closed,
there surface,about the insiders,
many notions and stands.


But,
how could she know?
there awaits,
behind the door,the timeless fathomless ocean
with love straits, unforeseen treasures.


She might have reserved ears
for a mere call
to pull apart the door.
But,
how a mute ocean call whistle?

Unless the hive of silence
dismantles on its own
a decision may live unborn.


But even if ship wrecks
and no rudder left,
got degenerated in to nothing
at least the rhymes of my cells
will attain her shore
struggling against
the cold, depth and the waves

Reviews

[Sebastian Romero]

What can there be said, this poem is simply great! Please write and upload more :) I loved everything about it, the metaphors, the rhythm, but especially that last stanza! Loved IT :)

[M P Ramesh]

sebastian,
thanks for the indepth reading....wish new writings ......actually am fond of Mexico and do mexican, aczetic, incan and of course mayan references are there more in my writings as noticed by Malayalam critics..... a recent story written AND PUBLISHED in 2009 named "THONNURAYA "....means a bath plaCE IN RIVER nila.... OF COURSE A TRADITIONAL ONE AND OF A PRIVATE PLACE OF A FAMILY IN RIVER nila ends with POPUL VOH..
we will interact further ...
MP

[Sebastian Romero]

That sounds very interesting! Wish to read more soon :)

[Ayushi Jha]

A strong feeling presented in a very assuaged manner. Loved it!

[M P Ramesh]

Ayushi,
Thanks for the exploration and the view expressed.
M P

[mou]

It is quite thought provoking one.You feature the thoughts in a beautiful way.

[M P Ramesh]

mou,
Thanks for the deep interest you have shown in the poem.
M P Ramesh

[Kripa Anna Cherian]

Wowe... It's just so wonderful expressions.. A cry from the depths of my heart

[katja]

oh my stars, this is simply wondrous!
*
i adore the continuous metaphor, it's seamless & still leaves saline impressions upon the mind...
... this is sterling writing & a pleasure to read
~ k

[M P Ramesh]

K,
Thanks for the deep exploration of the mood and the careful comments
MP

[Mary Helda]

Wow,,so carefully written....with deep emotion..this is truely a beautiful piece

[M P Ramesh]

Mary,
Thanks for the notice and words.........................

[Mary Helda]

you are welcome:-)

[Ellen Kolman]

Beautifully written poem...I love the imagery...I love how you posed the question, "how could she know?" thank you for sharing!

[M P Ramesh]

elly,

Thanks for the reading and further deep look in to the diction of the work
read moreelly,

Thanks for the reading and further deep look in to the diction of the work

MPR

[Ellen Kolman]

my pleasure!

[Yusra Arub]

I love how you posed an argument within your poem as well, in the lines "Unless the hive of silence dismantles on its own..."
So inspiring, and thank you for your review!

[M P Ramesh]

yusra,
Thanks for your sharp notice... welcome
MPR

[Cameron Simo]

This poem has such strong language and it sucks you in with incredible imagery. All of it comes together in harmony to form an amazing piece of writing. I honestly have nothing else ot say because the poem has left me practically speechless. Very well done, my friend!

[M P Ramesh]

Sshakenbakee,

Thank you for sharp reading and the deep review.

MPR