Sisyphus

~Sisyphus~

No vision yet?
The knowledge you seek
is resistant
to mental-yanking.
A lap-dog yipping at the ankles
gets kicked.
Yell all you want at the door;
just don't expect to hear the answer
over your yelping.
So they said, “Do this.”
and you went along,
claiming “Yes, I see”
blindly, going in circles.
What have you learned
from this exercise?
The theme is Sisyphus.
“When you're tired of pushing that rock,”
I said “come see me.”
                       ©J.E.S.
 

Reviews

[Edward Clay]

"Yell all you want at the door.
Just don't expect to hear the answer
over your yelping."

this would read better as one sentence, broken by a dash or a semi colon. Keep the pause, but dont have the sudden stop of a period, as it breaks it up too much.

I can honestly say I have no idea what's going on here, as there is quite a lot of dialogue and not enough to create an image or a picture. But maybe that's not the point. Either way, it bounces with a certain rhythm, which I like. If it flows, then it has somethig most poems don't!