Prison

second haiku for contest

       Pain is my prison

wings beat against bodys cage

     my mind learns to fly

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love this piece..and how real it is to feel those wings beat...the youth in our mind are feathers that do not match what are actually on the wings of age.

[jesserose99]

Thank you Jacob...so true that's exactly how I feel.

[alifeacoustic]

Imprisoned you cry
Until the guards keys I steal
And smile as you fly :)

Hmm, im getting used to these :)

[jesserose99]

there fun aren't they, nice job..i love it!!

[Tobias H. Reese]

One more note; while a traditional to-the-letter haiku isn't a prerequisite for the film project(s) I do encourage them. Peace.

[Tobias H. Reese]

Thank you for your submission Jesse!

Keep discovering more about the haiku...you are on your way!!

[Willard Wells]

Excellent work young lady. Short and you made your escape. Now you are free to be you and fly.

[jesserose99]

Thank you Willard...too sweet. :)

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This is beautiful! I love it...

[jesserose99]

thank you Lynn!!