Into The Fall

Mixed believers and empty stairwells

Led me to your darkened room

All hearts racing, fixed emotions

You held my hand, and pulled me through

 

And we ran away from

The open doors and open arms

And we ran away towards

The cureless people we've become

 

Empty spaces were quickly filled

With superficial words you said

And I can't quite figure out

Why I was just a passing fad

 

And we ran away from

The open doors and open arms

And we ran away towards

The cureless people we've become

 

And we ran away from

The open doors and open arms

And we ran away towards

The cureless people we've become

 

You don't even know this,

You could make it right

Yeah, you don't even know this,

You could make it right

Author's Note

Just experimenting (: Keep in mind I'm only 14.

Reviews

[perfectlymetiKulous]

Wow...
For you to be only 14, this was a very powerful piece of work.
And no explanations necessary about keeping anything in mind. This was very well done. Beautifully written. The only thing I would say is the formatting rather distracts me from the work, but if that was the way it was intended, then it just forces me to be a closer reader. :)
Very nicely done. I wish I wrote so well when I was 14. Can't wait to read more of your work.

[Kelley]

Well I hope someone made it right with you.
I really enjoyed reading this Jess!

I love the way your started this out.........

"Mixed believers and empty stairwells"

Perfect way to grab the attention of the reader.
Great write thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Sabine]

And we ran away from
The open doors and open arms
And we ran away towards
The cureless people we've become

Jess,
gifted and falling into yourself,
your words--so brazen and beautiful. *S

[Hales]

You seem much older than you are! Your style is great and very different. =)
It's a good thing!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! This was beautiful...And I must say you are very talented at this age :)

[maffw]

I like it. A bit dark, but like... ye, let's see some more.