Underneath the smile

Underneath the smile

A Poem by Lucia
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Dedicated to a certain person in my life, whom I love dearly, yet am never able to impress.

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Scars decorating my wrists and knees,

Hidden wounds beneath my skin

The deepest torment ails the heart.

With each passing pulsation,

A pang of heartbreak strikes.

 

Unshed tears veil blue eyes,

With fists clenching tight against skin.

Nauseating emotions engross my being,

I withdraw into myself once more,

Disappointment leaking from every pore.

 

Why can’t you see that everything I have done has been for you?

 

 


 

© 2012 Lucia


Author's Note

Lucia
Constructive criticism is always appreciated.

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This flows smoothly and your words reflect your intent very well. Sometimes people see the truth, but act like they don't because they don't feel the same way and don't want to hurt your feelings. I hope that isn't the case here. I wish you much happiness.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Tormenting sentiments tear at the reader. Indeed a sad write. I can’t comment on the Love, for love has it’s own mind.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very raw and emotional. felt it more as i read on. and i love the honesty in the last line. just completely finishes the poem off beautifully. well done. i loved it

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A lot of despair in that poem.
It makes the reader wonder wonder why one stays in a relationship where there is such pain and sadness.
Good luck with your writing!
Lizbeth

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well I like it. The feeling in the poem and wording all comes together. Keep trying. Sometimes ll it takes is the leap of faith

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 16, 2012
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Tags: broken, sad, hurt, overlooked, scars, wounds, unremarkable, forgettable, tears, heartbreak

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