Pieces of me are falling.

I'm falling apart.

Pieces of me are fallin.

                                 (G)oing

                                     some   

-------------------------------------where.

Pieces of me are _____

                         -falling-

I ' m                      no                      l o s t

                                where.

together piece to myself trying I'm.

                            Yes,

                                  I know,

-------------------------------------pieces of me are falling.

Reviews

[Joshua Ramirez]

I'm not an expert, but I do like how the structure of the poem in relevance to the way "you are falling". I didn't get the jumbled line at first, but the reads put in a different order would make sense. I've never made a poem like this before, and I was the other one "I don't Know How"... very interesting structure.
The suppose since the poems I make are never this short, I cannot fully appreciate the loaded conciseness of your poem and the meaning it carries in only few lines.
Great job! I liked it either way, and I understand that feeling.

[Jaybee23]

thanks, I feel I like to keep them concise, I'd end up writing a story, which you should read under my page:)

[Joshua Ramirez]

You are welcome, you should check out some of my other works. I would be nice to get some feedback on those as well. And, is the story called "Calmer Waters"?
Add me as a friend too!
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