the rat ran up the clock

kids poem

The rat ran up the clock !!

　

Hickery dickery dock,

The rat ran up the clock,

The mouse struck one,

Down came the old rat,

　

Hickery dickery dock,

the rat ran up the clock,

the mouse struck two,

the old rat held on tight,

　

Hickery dickery dock,

the rat ran up the clock,

the clock struck three,

The rat came tumbling down,

eeeeeech,

screech,

I’m falling,

Boom , Boom,

SO that old rat,

Ran back up the clock,

The clock struck four,

And that was the end of that poor old rat.

　

The end,

BY:Jennifer Little

Author's Note

kids poem i wrote tell me what you think

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

Nicely done the mouse fighting to protect his right to run up the clock made me smile. Keep em' coming

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Haha, its kind of sad but really quite funny in a fun way. I love it!

[Morrigan Nicole]

How sad! Poor little rat!

[Kiari Sabon]

lol i like it makes me think of my old pet rat

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

This is a fun write, though I noticed it is similar too the original nursery rhyme called:
Hickory, Dickory Dock
Yet, you changed it with a bit of a different story with the rat and mouse.
I like this, but I like the original better.

[Starcaller]

Interesting.

[Maria.F.T]

this is so cute with the onomatopoeia !!!!

[Captain]

Not very original to be honest.
'Captain

[SlightlyOdd]

Its very cute my mom used to read me a very similar poem but i can't recall it's name

[A Soap Mess Stories]

What a wonderful take on a children's nursery rhyme....good job!