Hell is upon us !

another one of my poems ok tell me what you think ......

Hell is upon us !

　

Going down a dark road,

Look up,

Look down,

No one around,

No body there,

Hello,

Anyone out there,

Where am i?

Answer me!

I start to see flames of fire,

Where am i ?

I asked again!

Then a figured thing pops out at me,

“says”, Your in Hell,

Welcome to Hell,

Wait!

Stop!

Help me God,

What did i do to deserve this?

Then i saw a bright light,

It was God,

He said,” It’s not your time yet,

Go Go back home your family needs you,”

　

　

BY:Jennifer Little

　

The End,

Author's Note

this is another one of my poems .... well tell me what you think ok ..... give me some reviews let me know what you think

Reviews

[UnderCompulsion]

I LOVED this!!It is a great poem.Make me think about life and death.

[Sleeping Maiden]

I loved this. It sounds like a bad dream or a near-death experience to me. Either way it was interesting to read. It makes you think about life in general and how our situations steers us whether we did something right or wrong.. hmm..
Love it! The meaning of life.. - such mystery.. we live to see how it is right?

Great write! thanks for sharing.

[Pencrafter]

This sounds like a bad dream. Such thoughts show how we yearn for something better and show that we have an innate spiritual need. Also, you pose a frequently asked question, 'What did I do to deserve this?' The poem highlights the struggle many people have in mistakenly thinking that God punishes us or creates terrible situations for us to suffer in. Your poem urges us to ponder the meaning of life. It's well-written and easy to understand. Nice job.

[SkrillexLover :)]

really did like this!!! Good job!! :)

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Hell is upon us

Your telling me, my ribs have the most horrible pains as well as my stomach! hell to me is the burning in my tummy! yeah what did I do to deserve this?

[MandaBear]

very cool

[TaylorH'sPoems]

I thought the rhythm was a bit choppy but I loved the frantic feeling of it. Loved it

[Kaylor Mason]

I like this; I especially like how you used traveling down a dark road alone as an image for crossing over in death. That's a good analogy.

[graynuss]

woww gosh i thouht u we're goin to hell !! we all fell that way sometime's just belive in god all the time !! bless u (: