Hell is upon us !
A Poem by
jennifer little
another one of my poems ok tell me what you think ......
Hell is upon us !
Going down a dark road,
Look up,
Look down,
No one around,
No body there,
Hello,
Anyone out there,
Where am i?
Answer me!
I start to see flames of fire,
Where am i ?
I asked again!
Then a figured thing pops out at me,
“says”, Your in Hell,
Welcome to Hell,
Wait!
Stop!
Help me God,
What did i do to deserve this?
Then i saw a bright light,
It was God,
He said,” It’s not your time yet,
Go Go back home your family needs you,”
BY:Jennifer Little
The End,
© 2012 jennifer little
Author's Note
this is another one of my poems .... well tell me what you think ok ..... give me some reviews let me know what you think
Reviews
Nicely stated expression of what seems to be a dream (or more like an out-of-body experience (OBE)). I think Dante would be delighted by this write... well, I was certainly delighted -- thanks.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Very powerful and I'm left wondering if this was a real experience because this is happening everywhere..
Posted 12 Years Ago
Very powerful and I'm left wondering if this was a real experience because this is happening everywhere..
WOW! POWERFUL!
Posted 12 Years Ago
WOW! POWERFUL!
Interesting, not my favorite but I do see the imagination in this.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Interesting, not my favorite but I do see the imagination in this.
religious mixed with some parts of imagination..(y)
Posted 12 Years Ago
religious mixed with some parts of imagination..(y)
Interesting....... its not my favorite poem it's more of a short story maybe you could add poetic description it doesn't have to be flowery or like a Stephen king book just description or a little more feeling
Posted 12 Years Ago
Interesting....... its not my favorite poem it's more of a short story maybe you could add poetic description it doesn't have to be flowery or like a Stephen king book just description or a little more feeling
Interesting take on Hell...Hell is one place I don't want to be...good job!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Interesting take on Hell...Hell is one place I don't want to be...good job!
Thought provoking. Really good, gives a great mental image.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Thought provoking. Really good, gives a great mental image.
interesting...near death? dream?
there's a tense switch at line 12 from present to past, then it slides back to present, then past by the end again.
If it were all in present tense...first person view....I think it would gain some power, but, it's pretty damn cool as is.
Cheers!
Posted 12 Years Ago
interesting...near death? dream?
there's a tense switch at line 12 from present to past, then it slides back to present, then past by the end again.
If it were all in present tense...first person view....I think it would gain some power, but, it's pretty damn cool as is.
Cheers!
It's an interesting view inside of you and your life.
Comment: A loving God would not think of putting people in a place of fiery torment for one day let alone eternity. Hell does, however, act as a metaphor to describe the depths of our troubled conscience and self-loathing. I am glad you end on a note of love.
Posted 12 Years Ago
It's an interesting view inside of you and your life.
Comment: A loving God would not think of putting people in a place of fiery torment for one day let alone eternity. Hell does, however, act as a metaphor to describe the depths of our troubled conscience and self-loathing. I am glad you end on a note of love.
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jennifer little jackson, MI
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hi im jen i am a single mother of one daughter .
i struggle from ptsd depression and anxiety .
from being in abusive realationships .
i enjoy the outdoors , nature swimming fishing camping boat..
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