MY DOG ATE MY HOME WORK!!!

well another one of my kids poems the funny ones...... and yea my boyfriend has two kids and we have three dogs and my big dog and little dog their still like puppys

MY DOG ATE MY HOME WORK!!!

Teacher, teacher

Wheres my home work?

I can tell you,

“But,” You wont believe me,

I left it on the floor,

And my rotten dog ate it,

MY dog ate my home work,

He chews anything that's on the floor.

Teacher , Teacher,

I'm telling the truth,

Teacher, teacher,

You got to believe me,

NO , No

Not a detention please,

Come on my dog did eat my home work it is so true.

THE END,

BY:Jennifer Little

Author's Note

well another one of my kids poems the funny ones...... and yea my boyfriend has two kids and we have three dogs and my big dog and little dog their still like puppys kind of and they like to chew chew chew and eat anything they grab the kids toys if their on the floor ...... so we can kind of relate to my poem ,....

Reviews

[LadyNaida]

I guess when you cry wolf to many times when something does happen people don't believe you.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Weird.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Oh funny, I wonder if this could really happen, i liked the childish style "Teacher, Teacher" :)

[Missy Moooooo]

Hah. Teachers never seem to believe. But I swear I have a vicious dog, he eats everything. >.< I can relate.

[Starcaller]

lol, this is funny...my baby sister ate my homework once :)

[Wretched Knight]

lol!

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Hahaha! It made me laugh it is so cute and sweet! Love how you made it!

[xx]

A cute poem! I've never used this excuse myself, but college is right ahead, so I suppose there's still some time for me. :)

I thought the first person point of view was charming and fit well within the context of the poem; I can definitely relate to the frustration of the poem's speaker as the teacher flatly rejects his excuse.

There are a few things you might want to look at, though. Lines nine and thirteen have that extra space right before the comma; perhaps you'd like to omit that space, but leave the space right after the commas as they are?

If this poem had been more of a formal rather than informal type, I might have suggested that you proofread for punctuation omission, but I think the inconsistency of punctuation is actually suitable for a piece like this. Narrated by a child who is desperately fishing for an excuse, he /would/ be frantic, which could account for the stylistic absence of commas in the last line, for instance.

Charming poem! Keep writing! :)

-Mina

[CrimsonBlaze]

Teachers are skeptical when it comes to the doggy ate my homework problem when in fact, many have experienced the true story. Nice write :D

[Tomislav Petricevic]

A funny poem. Good write.