Traveiling down a dark road!!!

This is kind of like a horror poem i get eaten by a vampire there... well let me know what you think

Traveling down a dark Road!!

I see myself traveling down this long black road,

I kept on walking,

As daylight passes by,

Oh what a joy,

It's getting darker, and darker,

I start to get scared,

There's no light to see,

I don't even got a flash light,

Oh man,

I'm really scared,

What should I do?

I see a man,

I call him over,

Asked him if there's any shelter anywhere for me to stay,

He wouldn't answer,

The old man just walked away,

I call out to him again,

He looked very upset,

He finally comes up to me,

His face was horrid looking,

His eyes were very bright and Red,

he looked like he had really sharp teeth,

Kind of like a vampire,

I get scared,

And I began to run,

Help me,

Help me,

I cry out,

But no help,

The old man catches up,

Attacks me,

Blood everywhere,

And I was dead.

The End ,

BY: Jennifer Little

Author's Note

just a horror flick poem lol... well just let me know what you think of it ...

Reviews

[Becky Clancy]

I like it ^^ I can totally relate to this (:

[Angelic Surrender]

I don't like dark roads. I've been on one for too long. Great poem.

[Cassie Fraga]

oooooooo... creeeeeepy.... grips the reader from the start and keeps them on edge... very nice!!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Cool!

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Nice horror poem story. I liked it alot. Good job.

[SuicidePact.]

wow horrific great job !

[exotic flotsam]

I read this twice. Quickly the first time. Then very easily paced the second. Slowly freed the power of this work. Kind of Snape pace. I might have ended it at "The old man catches up". Tons of visual metaphor lurks in this. Dark, but cool.

[Morrigan Nicole]

very dark and to my taste. tastes like bitterness.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love the dark intensity to this...

[misscb]

Loved the way you told the story so well... Well described write... Great job... Well done!!!