Looking into the stars!!!

well this is a poem i was working on earlyer typing out and decided to stop and work on somthing else so i hope you enjoy this poem

Looking into the stars!

　

I look into the stars,

I see my self in the sky,

I want to fly high,

Oh gee,

How i wish i could just fly away,

And live wonderlussly upon the sky,

I look up into the you’r eyes,

I see a frightened little girl,

Oh how I feel so ashamed,

That little girl was me,

I seen myself in this cruel place,

This cruel world,

living upon people,

cruel,

mean,

sensational people,

Love,

Sex,

Rock,

And Roll,

I don’t see this upon my eyes,

I wonder through the sky,

Trying to find answers,

And hope,

Dream,

Can’t my dreams come true,

Oh how i wish people could understand,

It’s night right,

It’s not right to pick on a poor little girl,

My mind is wondering upon the stars,

My mind is wondering,

Wonderussly blank,

Wonderlussly criuse of this world,

our world is dark, and gray,

Full of cruel,

Cruel people.

The end,

　

BY:Jennifer Little

Author's Note

it's a poem .,... don't really know how to explain it but i love this poem its really awsome i see my self looking upon this stars thinking of all these things .....
well i hope you enjoy this poem and let me know what you think

Reviews

[Thea]

Your insight was awesome...I enjoyed this poem a lot...Nice job!
:)))

[Coyote Poetry]

Most of wish to be able to escape to a better place. I like the description and the location of the escape. Good description allow the reader to understand your emotion and your desire. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[SuicidePact.]

this is really good! great job jen

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Very creative! An interesting flow of words from the heart and mind of a dreamer. Great work. :-)

[Roe]

Great write

[EMMIE]

very good and creative

[Marie]

Yes, I see this little girl wandering the stars, looking for a way out of this world.

[T. Michele Smock]

I LOVE IT JENS

[Evelyn Storm]

I can hear your determination rise above your circumstances to obtain your dreams in this poem. Sometimes in life you have to believe that if its to be its up to me.Keep reaching for your dreams and don't let people or circumstances keep you from making them come true. Good poem and keep writing.

[Sophie]

I liked it better in the beginning, the message, then when you started talking about people I liked it too, but I think the wnating to live under the stars message was very inspirational. This is one of your better pieces :) i like it :)
Thank you for all the reviews on my stuff, by the way.
Keep writing!