MY SEXII LOVER !

now this is just a love poem >>. i put sexii spelled that way because that's how i wanted it spelled it's a great love poem ... hope you enjoy let me know what u think

 

 

 

 

       MY SEXII LOVER!

 I belive in happy ends,

I love you---- I've have no other chance,

Before i met you, my days were gray,

I'd like to kiss you, If  i may,

For so long i've been wanting you,

I'm totally crazy about you,

I cant think of anything else at all,

Open you'r heart, you can tell me all .

 

Love skipper jen

 

 

 

    BY: JENNIFER LITTLE

 

Author's Note

well it's basically a love poem .. i like writeing them it's fun to experience new word s to mess with and build up more and more for it ... i will be posting more of my stories pretty soon i put one on here and also my books and skits i write .....


i edited this so hope you enjoy reading it i fixed the grammer and spelling


tell me what u think ...!!!!!

Reviews

[Midgy]

Pros:
-Good concept
-Rhyming was good up until a certain point.
-Good imagery.
Cons:
-Title doesn't match the actual concept of the poem.
-"For so long i've been wanting you,
I'm totally crazy about you,
I cant think of anything else at all,
Open you'r heart, you can tell me all ."
The two pairs of lines at the end were ended the same way. I don't see that as rhyming, but as repetitiveness.
-Grammatical issues that I'd work on if I were you.

[Marie]

Thisis a nice, happy love poem, which so many aren't.