Someone your not!

just a poem let me know if you like the first version or the second version better

  first version 

                        Going through life, 

                       Trying to be someone your not, 

                       Putting on a fake mask everyday, 

                        Not knowing who you truly are, 

                        Allowing the drugs to take control, 

                        Raising your head up high, 

                       Trying to figure out who you are, 

                       Life isn't fare, 

                        Who am i ?, 

                        Drugs took control, 

                         Your mind wonders everyday speechless you are, 

                          You feel as all hope is gone, 

                          Lost, 

                         Demons from Hell has taken over, 

                         They've taken your mind, 

                          Their trying to steal your soul, 

                          Whens it all going to end, 

                           Everytime you run away, 

                           You always end back up where it all began, 

                            You wonder when it's all going to stop, 

                              But you feel as there's no way out, 

                             Your running scared, 

                              Noone to hold you, 

                             Noone to love you, 

                             You see demons everywhere you look, 

                              Your mind is tormented and lost, 

                             You wonder is all hope lost, 

                           Your looking for perfection, 

                            But never can find it, 

                          Should you go or should you stay?

                          All these times you've cried, 

                          Your wanting to die, 

                          Then one day you awoke, 

                         And found your tre meaning, 

                          You went home, 

                           Momma, 

                            Dadda, 

                       I'm home 

 second version 

    someone your not 

    going through life, 

trying to be someone your not, 

putting on a fake mask everyday, 

not knowing who you truly are,  

allowing the drugs to take control, 

raising your head up high, 

trying to figure out who you  truly are, 

life isn't fare, 

who am i? 

drugs took control, 

your mind is spinning running wild everyday, 

your mind wonders everyday, 

speechless you are, 

you feel as all hope is gone, 

lost, 

demons from hell are taking over, 

controlling my mind, 

their stealing your soul, 

when is it all going to end? 

every time you run away you end back up where it all began, 

you wonder when it's all going to stop, 

but you feel as if it's to late, 

there's no hope, 

you feel as it's to late, 

running scared, 

noone to hold you, 

noone to love you, 

you see demons everywhere you look, 

haunted soul, 

your mind is tormented and lost, 

you wonder if all hope is lost, 

your looking for perfection, 

but never can find it, 

should you go or should you stay, 

all these times you've cried, 

wanting to die, 

then one day a new day became, 

you woke up, 

found the true meaning, 

and you went home, 

momma , 

dadda, 

i'm home

                       

Author's Note

all my writings that is sad or anything like this one is based upon my past life .
hope you enjoy this one

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sad and sorry tale indeed. So many people struggle, especially in teenage to identify themselves and many take to drugs, alcohol, eating disorder, self harm etc to express their feelings. You capture the essence here. A crafting of the typos and syntax errors will make it even better.

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review