Rudolf is sick

Rudolf is sick

A Poem by jennifer little
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just another kids poem that is funny i have a new version of this poem let me know what one is better . first version or second

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first version 
   Mommy , 
Mommy call the doctor , 
Call the doctor right away , 
Rudolph is sick , 
Something's very wrong, 
Mommy please call the doctor, 
For Rudolf might die ,
His nose wont glow , 
His face is pale, 
   Doctor came a knocking , 
What seems to be the problem here?
Oh doctor oh doctor, 
Rudolf is surely sick, 
Doctor checked him out , 
He said, 
I'm  sorry to say , 
But Rudolf is surely allergic to your tin roof , 
Oh no , 
Oh my , 
This means Santa cant visit me anymore
second version 
 mommy, 
mommy call the doctor call the police right away, 
rudolf is oh so sick, 
oh so so very sick, 
something is very wrong, 
mommy please call the doctor, 
for rudolf could possibly die, 
his nose wont glow, 
his face is so pale, 
oh mommy please call the doctor, 
knock, knock,knock, 
the doctors at the door, 
what seems to be the problem here? 
oh doctor, 
oh doctor, 
please fix rudolf hes very very sick, 
something is surely wrong with him, 
fix him before he dies, 
for i don't want him to die, 
doctor checked him out, 
he said, 
i'm sorry to say, 
but rudolf is surely allergic to your house, 
he's allergic to your tin roof, 
oh no, 
oh my, 
santa cant come make visits anymore to my house, 
oh no, 
oh my, 
how will i get my presents 

© 2022 jennifer little


Author's Note

jennifer little
hope you like this poem
please no rude comments

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Haha very good. But i think there are some spelling errors. And anyone could check me out? sorry for advertising but i'm new.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Funny and entertaining write. Poor Rudolph...

I think you wanted to write "somethings" in the fifth line of the poem...

Sincerely
Dhiman

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Humorous, has a holiday feeling of fun and wit, I like this, simple, lighthearted.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


oh well,he can always hoover over your roof

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


Poor Rudolf. Need some time off. A entertaining poem dear friend.
Coyote

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Couple of spelling errors but easily corrected.

You put visions in my head of rudolph lying at a doorstep and a doctor checking him out with his stethoscope.

Funny poem - put a smile on my face.

Mark.

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Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on December 30, 2016
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jennifer little
jennifer little

jackson, MI



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hi im jen i am a single mother of one daughter . i struggle from ptsd depression and anxiety . from being in abusive realationships . i enjoy the outdoors , nature swimming fishing camping boat.. more..

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