Rudolf is sick

just another kids poem that is funny i have a new version of this poem let me know what one is better . first version or second

first version 

   Mommy , 

Mommy call the doctor , 

Call the doctor right away , 

Rudolph is sick , 

Something's very wrong, 

Mommy please call the doctor, 

For Rudolf might die ,

His nose wont glow , 

His face is pale, 

   Doctor came a knocking , 

What seems to be the problem here?

Oh doctor oh doctor, 

Rudolf is surely sick, 

Doctor checked him out , 

He said, 

I'm  sorry to say , 

But Rudolf is surely allergic to your tin roof , 

Oh no , 

Oh my , 

This means Santa cant visit me anymore

second version 

 mommy, 

mommy call the doctor call the police right away, 

rudolf is oh so sick, 

oh so so very sick, 

something is very wrong, 

mommy please call the doctor, 

for rudolf could possibly die, 

his nose wont glow, 

his face is so pale, 

oh mommy please call the doctor, 

knock, knock,knock, 

the doctors at the door, 

what seems to be the problem here? 

oh doctor, 

oh doctor, 

please fix rudolf hes very very sick, 

something is surely wrong with him, 

fix him before he dies, 

for i don't want him to die, 

doctor checked him out, 

he said, 

i'm sorry to say, 

but rudolf is surely allergic to your house, 

he's allergic to your tin roof, 

oh no, 

oh my, 

santa cant come make visits anymore to my house, 

oh no, 

oh my, 

how will i get my presents 

Author's Note

hope you like this poem
please no rude comments

Reviews

[Chelsea]

Haha very good. But i think there are some spelling errors. And anyone could check me out? sorry for advertising but i'm new.

[Inject Positivity]

Funny and entertaining write. Poor Rudolph...

I think you wanted to write "somethings" in the fifth line of the poem...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Michael X]

Humorous, has a holiday feeling of fun and wit, I like this, simple, lighthearted.

[wordman]

oh well,he can always hoover over your roof

[Coyote Poetry]

Poor Rudolf. Need some time off. A entertaining poem dear friend.
Coyote

[matrixmark]

Couple of spelling errors but easily corrected.

You put visions in my head of rudolph lying at a doorstep and a doctor checking him out with his stethoscope.

Funny poem - put a smile on my face.

Mark.