blood shed !

thought this would make a a great song i have two versions of this second version is new let me know if you like the first or second version better

   first version 

The blood shed,...
The horror,
The power running through my veins,
TIme for revenge,
Sorrow must come,
Fear's running through my head,
Death will come,
Time to suffer,
Time for pain,
Must choose your side,
The devil in my head,
You must choose,
Soon you will die,
The souls will be lost,
You'll be trapped,
No where to run,
No where to hide,
Tears of fear running through your head,
The blood shed,
The venge's running through your veins,
You must join a side,
You must join with him,
Or you have chosen death,
Pain and sorrow,
The blood will shed tonight,
For revenge,
All souls must die,
The evil is coming ,
The devil is hear,
He's more powerful than ever,
You must choose a side,
Or the blood will shed

      second version 

  blood shed, 

   the blood shed, 

the horror, 

the power running through my veins, 

time for revenge, 

sorrow must come, 

fears running through my head, 

death will come, 

time to suffer, 

time for pain, 

must choose a side before its to late, 

the devil is in my head, 

you must choose, 

soon you will die, 

souls will be lost, 

you'll be trapped, 

no where to run, 

no where to hide, 

tears of fear running down my face, 

tears of fear running through my head, 

the blood shed, 

the venges running through your veins, 

you must choose a side, 

you must join a side, 

you must join with him, 

before it's to late, 

when it's to late, 

pain and sorrow, 

the blood will shed tonight, 

for revenge, 

all souls must die, 

the evil is coming, 

the devil is hear, 

he's more powerful than ever, 

you must choose a side,

or there will be blood shed

Author's Note

tell me what you think

Reviews

[Kitty]

The devil is hear,

Here* ?

It's got a good beat I guess.

The blood shed,...

The ... isn't needed.

Look up iambic pentameter or tetrameter or whatever. This poem does have that in places. It would flow better if it had it throughout.

[wordman]

lot of power in this write,but a lot of truth as well
this is your calling