The end of it all!

well thought it would make a great song ,.... its kind of based upon my life a little when I get down and sad I just write what I feel

  first version 

This is the end of it all,
This is the end of everything,
I'm so fed up with it all,
I'm sick of everything,
You say you love me,
It's all nothing but lie's,
It's all deset,
Nothing but bullshit,

This is the end of it all,
This is the end of everything,
I'm so fed up,
Sick of all the lie's,
Sick of being tormented,
The tortured soul,
The hurt in my eye's

You bring me down,
You make up all these lie's,

I'm so fed up of the lie's,
Sick of being brought down,
Sick of bidding my tears,
Sick of bidding my sorrow and pain,
When's it all going to end,

The sadness in my eye's,
The tormented soul,
Just want to run free,
No more peace,
No more rigiouseness,

This is the end of it all,
This is the end of everything,
Keeping all my fears,
All my pain,
All my sorrows inside,
All the lie's,
All the hatred,

   second version 

the end of it all 

this is the end of it all, 

this is the end of everything, 

i'm so fed up with it all, 

i'm sick of everything, 

you say you love me, 

but it's nothing but a lie, 

nothing but bull crap, 

this is the end of it all, 

this is the end of everything, 

i'm fed up, 

taken the hurt for one last time, 

sick of all the lies, 

all of the tournament, 

tourchered soul, 

the hurt in my eyes, 

you bring me down, 

you make up lies, 

sick of being brought down, 

sick of all the tears, 

the sorrow, 

the pain, 

when is it all going to end? 

the sadness in my eyes, 

begins to show, 

the torched soul, 

just want to run free, 

no more peace, 

no more righteousness, 

this is the end of it all, 

the end of everything, 

keeping all my fears, 

all my pain, 

all my sorrows inside, 

all the lies, 

all the hatred, 

this is the very end

Author's Note

let me know what you think
theres two versions to this poem let me know what one you like better number one or number two

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Such a powerful, painful lyric... and how I could relate too well.. the feelings that can overwhelm us at times and take us to the edge of ourselves. Hope you're finding some people to be lights in those dark places of you, dear one...

[wordman]

hey girl,deset should be deceit a great write about pain of love
I don`t know why men lie about love