the devils graveyard part 2

Another dark horror poem

     first version       

You were warned,

You were warned not to go there,

You decided to go there at midnight,

On a full moon,

You didn't believe me,

I warned you, 

I told you not to go to the devils graveyard,

Its cursed,

Who shall go there,

Who shall reap,

Who shall go there will parish,

You'll die a slow painful death,

The devils strong,

He will torture you,

You will bleed,

You will scream,

You'll be tormented,

No one will here you,

There's no turning back now,

Once you go there you'll never come back,

Your famed to hell,

So say your good bye now,

Good by my dear friend,

And welcome to the gates of hell.

second version 

 the devils graveyard part 2 

 you were warned, 

you were warned not to go there, 

you decided to go anyways, 

on a full moon in the midnight sky, 

walking through the graveyard, 

you were warned not to go, 

that the place was cursed, 

the devil's graveyard, 

it's cursed, 

who shall go, 

who shall stay, 

there's no escape once entered, 

all that go shall perish, 

you will die a slow painful death, 

the devil's strong, 

he will torture you,

you will bleed, 

you'll scream, 

full of tormented souls, 

no one will here your cries, 

there's no turning back now, 

once you go there you'll never come back, 

your stuck in hell, 

so say good by, 

good by my dear friend, 

enter if you dare, 

and welcome to the gates of hell 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think
first version or second version which one do you like better

Reviews

[The dark story]

It is like the words of a Death, laughing at the audacity of the human for crossing paths with him, ignorant of the price.

[wordman]

jen this sounds like he making of a good book or short story
read both