The Vampires!

just a fun poem i wrote hope you like it

   The vampires! 

They thirst upon your blood, 

They lurk upon the night,

They want your blood, 

They want to suck you dry, 

Some will redeem you, 

And make you their slave, 

You must thirst upon human blood, 

If you disobey, 

You will be tormented,

Tourcherd, 

Until you die, 

They wont take it easy on you, 

They wont let you go fast, 

They will take it nice and slow, 

You'll be screaming with pain, 

Until you die, 

You will bow down unto the princess, 

For your souls will be hers, 

She thirst upon you, 

The vampires of the night are out, 

Seeking souls to devour and kill, 

Seeking new recruits, 

SO you better watch out, 

When you go out at night. 

Author's Note

let me know what you think

Reviews

[Ryan Henderson]

WOW! I love the vampire genre, I have even written my own vampire series that is posted on my profile (Book One: A Hero's Journey, Book Two: Soldier of Destiny, and Book Three, Beside The Dying Fire) and I just love this vampire poem. I love this poem, I have absolutely NO critique for it whatsoever! I Really think that you have a good talent for writing, I like your style, please, PLEASE keep writing vampire poems and/or stories, I would read them in a heartbeat! Please keep at writing, any time you have a vampire writing piece, I will read it as soon as I see that you have posted one, just send me a message or a read request and I will get right to reading them! Great work!

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review and yes ill write some more poems and mabey a short storie so you can read them ..

[Ryan Henderson]

YES that would be awesome!