Great path Turned into doom!!!!!!!!!!!!!

just a poem i came up with ..

   I was walking through a great path, 

It was oh so lovely, 

Everything in it was so shinny, 

And also colorful, 

I could hear the whistling wind blow, 

Hear the birds chirping, 

I walked further, 

The path started to grow old, 

The path started fading away, 

The colors were oh so gone, 

It was shrinking, 

Where was i going?

How was i going to get there?

The stars of the night started to shine oh so bright, 

I could feel a cool breeze, 

It was getting oh so cold, 

Then it turned pitch black, 

Out popped a winged creature, 

I was so scared, 

I didn't no what to do , 

There was no where to hide, 

No where to go, 

I felt as my soul was leaving my body, 

I went up into the sky, 

I was wondering what was going on, 

The winged figure said, 

Your in Hell, 

You been sentenced here for your sins, 

And you been walking a path of darkness all your life, 

Now i got you, 

Your mine, 

Your sins will be punished, 

No turning back now, 

For i have won your soul, 

Then that was it, 

Fiery pit of hell, 

Lake of fire, 

All hope was gone.

Author's Note

let me know what you think of this poem !!!!!!!!!

Reviews

[Mark]

Sometimes just when we think everything is alright, we find that we suddenly are in the midst of a horrible place. And sometimes the reverse is true. Nice reflections.

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review

[EMMIE]

Well damn! Lol, oh the adventures of life...and hell. You tricked me, I was thinking I was going to read something light and happy, but took that poem and twisted it with darkness and I LOVE it!

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review