Into a strange world!

just another picture i took and turned into a poem ~!

   Going over a bridge, 

I see a bunny hopping, 

He was going over the same bridge as me, 

The bridge was wavy looking, 

There were weird looking vines, 

Beautiful flowers, 

This place was oh so magical, 

I felt as if this place was my home, 

It was oh so beautiful, 

It was very colorful, 

Then i came across weird looking mushrooms, 

They were mushroom homes, 

On the top of them they looked as if they were space ships, 

It was oh so cool, 

I just had to go look at it closer, 

Then i had fallen into the water, 

The water was oh so deep, 

I couldn't swim, 

For there was a whorl pool coming , 

And it had sucked me under, 

When i came back up i wasn't in the same world, 

I was in a whole new world, 

I swore i was tripping or something, 

I new this couldn't be real, 

The world had singing and dancing trolls, 

Everything was very colorful, 

Oh how this world was so beautiful, 

I wanted to stay there and never come back home again.

Author's Note

let me know what you think ... i was thinking of taking this one as well and turning it into a really cool storie

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

You have really taken us to the spot...your imagery is vivid. Emotive and well written. The photo is a little difficult to see in the thumbnail size. Maybe you can post it full size at the top of the poem? Lydi*

[Inda]

I like the references to alice in wonderland and there is great a descriptive narrative, i would inject a bit more emotion into it so that it doesn't feel like all but description. In between describing stuff be more specific about what the character feels. Having said that, i like the direction of the story and your descriptive powers are great, this could be a fantastic piece as well, i like it and hope you keep doing fantasy stuff.

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i like how story develop it self. fantasy is very funny there. it s twisting story at nice way . i realy enjoyed.