Demons from Hell!

just a poem i wrote poped into my head

    Creatures of the night lurk upon us. 

The demons from Hell, 

Seeing who's souls they can steal, 

They want to drag you to the pits of Hell, 

For you have sined, 

They want you in Hell,

So they can torcher you, 

Laugh at you, 

Eat your soul, 

For you'll never live again, 

You'll die over and over, 

Thrown into a lake of fire, 

Your flesh burning, 

Bugs crawling through your body, 

You'll wish you never sined, 

You'll try to ask for forgiveness, 

The demons laugh at you and say, 

There's no turning back now once you have sined, 

Once you have been dammed to Hell.

Author's Note

tell me what you think

Reviews

[A Soap Mess Stories]

A graphic depiction of what hell will be like...very descriptive....

[Ashira Macy]

I almost expect there to be evil maniacal laughter at the end of this. I liked how dark it was.

[Prabha Salimath]

Nice poem suffering & pain showed correctly. It looks you are really obsessed of vampires, demons and concept of hell, don't you?

[Malister Mikey]

So many tortures one can inflict on the human body and it is endless so there is no getting used to such a place I assume. The bug part would be far worse than anything else that you mentioned of these horrors though for one such as I, feels no worries about these tortures, because I would gladly take any if that is the price I had to pay to live this life I have,

Sincerely, Malister Mikey

[Coyote Poetry]

"You'll try to ask for forgiveness,
The demons laugh at you and say,
There's no turning back now once you have sinned,
Once you have been dammed to Hell."
I liked the poem. Create situation and bad ending. Need to write the story now. The who, what, where, when and how? Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[TL Boehm]

bugs crawling through your body. I think that would be the worst, don't you?

[Author Rucha Joshi]

Hell awesome!
Halloween feels!
I liked how you made use of intricate vocabulary to picture the emotions...deep and dark!
Really Awesome!

[Love Nik]

Ok no more sinning for me!! Lol very scary. Nice read

[B-poet]

Very passionate & imaginative. Nice work. A unique & interesting write. :)

[Laura Lynn]

My favorite line is "The demons laugh at you and say,/There's no turning back now once you have 'sined,'/Once you have been 'dammed' ..." Aside from preachers I don't think I ever thought of the demons like this before, those devils. I used to be scared in a scared way and the season reminds us to beware, be wary