Lake of fire!

just a description off a picture of hell

    

   There is  a lake of fire,
Beneath our land,
The tormented souls that have been lost,
It's called the pit's of Hell,
The smell of rotting away flesh,
People damned for their souls,
All that has been lost,
No turning back now,
Can't be forgiven once your in Hell,
Into a lake of fire,
Oh how so many souls have been lost,
There is a beast,
A beast o so Evil and mean,
He is a dragon,
The eyes so dark,
He will tortured you,
For you are being punished for your sins,
The smell of brimstone,
The flesh eating away,
The regret from your sins,
Shoved right into your face,
Flash backs of all that you have done,
All the evil,
Punished to Hell.

Author's Note

let me know what you think of this poem

Reviews

[R Smith]

the second picture of hell from you and its even better than the first i read earlier, you have a future in horror i think, this is certainly scary, a great work on a subject from the dawn of the world and before, magnificent :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Reminded me of some fairy tales that I read during my childhood, an enjoyable read here with a nice description,
thankyou for sharing

[yuki]

Love this except a suggestion would be when saying "o" always do capitalization and a quotation mark after it other then that great work and love this

[Dipanjan Dutta]

One more threat to the misdeeds...like this too...just one edit...

"He will torture you" instead of "He will tortured you"... :)

[ksscampos]

This is a dark poem.. I LIKE!! you painted such a vivid picture, as if you took the readers in a tour.

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review

[Dark Rose]

Wow I love it. This is amazing.

[jennifer little]

thanks for reviewing my poem

[Dark Rose]

No problem

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I think you've realized your goal of scaring the heck out of some of us.
The imagery was vivid and full of colors. You do well with translating your
thoughts into words.

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review

[The Black Warrior]

I like it, very eloquent, imaginative, and straightforward. You painted the picture with words. Well done.
Thank you for sharing

~Suk

[jennifer little]

ur welcome and thanks for reviewing it

[K.N. Thorn]

I thought it was great. I would drop the 'd' on 'tortured', wrong tense, and the 'the' s in 'the smell, the flesh, and the regret'. I don't think they are necessary and would give more power to your words. Great job overall, I like how you base most of your things from pictures, such an endless supply of ideas! :)