Hide away!

a poem on how i feel about my self and also other stuff as well .

   The flesh from your body eaten away, 

You been beaten, 

You been put down, 

You been hurt,

You feel so much shame, 

No one loves you, 

No one likes you, 

Is this really the end?

The world is oh so cruel, 

Wheres the peace, 

Where's the freedom, 

Drugs, 

Alcohol, 

Drink our sorrows away, 

Hide our pain, 

Hide our shame, 

There's no life after death right! 

People say believe in God, 

Trust in God, 

For he will bring you love and peace, 

There is life after death, 

Follow us and you will see, 

Hell is upon us, 

Hell is under us, 

Heaven's in the sky, 

Golden gates, 

SO much glory, 

Guess we'll see when we get there.

Author's Note

well just a little poem i wrote ... let me know what you think about it

Reviews

[Botania]

Tapping into all the insecurities. Bringing to word the only hope, God. When we obey the First Commandment, love Him,
with all our heart, mind, and soul we glimpse eternity in trying to love something so large and infinite. In that attempt, that precious attempt, we learn to love without boundaries infinitely. All of a sudden we exist on a different plain, seeing things all differently. It's not what we receive, it's what we give to others ... His love. And in that we recognize this and earnestly
impart it, we become like Him, made in His image. He is merciful and through Reconciliation forgives all to make us whole again.

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review

[Botania]

Most welcome.

[Nikki]

I like this a lot as well, I would have used "you've been" instead of 'you been' but other than that it was really good. Very nice flow. Good job girl! :)