Horse's !

Just a poem i wrote about horses cause i love horses their so cool

   I love horses, 

Their beauty is oh so whelming, 

Their creatures who are so dwelling, 

Wild ones, 

Skittish ones, 

Tame ones, 

Friendly one, 

Mean ones, 

Horse's are fun, 

Their loving, 

Their caring, 

Sometimes their more of your friends than your own friends,

Horse's have so many colors, 

They come in different sizes and shapes, 

Oh the beauty of horse's 

They are so cool, 

They are so sweet, 

I love horse's oh so much.

Author's Note

let me know what you think

Reviews

[Elina]

Of course I had to take a look at this one...being a donkey/mule trainer, I also love equines.
This is a nice, simple little poem. I did notice I few things that may need fixing. I will point them out and then you can do what you will with my suggestions.

"Their beauty is oh so whelming" I believe the word you were looking for, here, is "overwhelming."
"Their creatures who are so dwelling" You have the wrong form of their/there/they're. It ought to be "they're," since you're saying that "they are" creatures. This is also the case in line twelve.
"Horse's have so many colours" Since you are using the plural form of horse, you don't need the apostraphe; you can simply leave it at "horses." Same goes for the last line.
The only other thing I noticed is that you may concider fixing the punctuation on this. The commas break it up too much and are in places where they are unneeded. In certain spots, you would do better to have a semicolon, instead. Or there are other areas where you can use a period.

Overall, this is a lovely little tribute to horses.

[jennifer little]

thanks for the review .. and yea i type out my poems late at night so i try to fix mistakes as best as i can but when im really tired it seems i make a lot of mistakes

[Elina]

Haha! I totally understand. I cannot tell you how many times I have written something and looked at it the next morning and think "What on earth is going on, here?"

[jennifer little]

i appreciate the review though