halloween poem

its a Halloween poem thought it would be cute to make one since its almost Halloween happy Halloween everyone

Halloween poem ...

tick tock , tick tock ,
the ghouls are coming ,
tick tock , tick tock ,
the monsters are out,
tick tock , tick tock ,
better stay indoors,
tick tock , tick tock ,
the zombies are awaking ,
tick tock , tick tock ,
the witches are whisping ,
tick tock , tick tock ,
oh no ,
better run , and hide
their coming ....  

Author's Note

hello everyone
thought I would write a Halloween poem since tomarrow is Halloween
hope you guys like it tell me what you think

Reviews

[A Soap Mess Stories]

time to watch out for all the ghouls and goblins...

[Heromen Selena]

That was cool :) I haven't read a poem with good rhythm use like that in a while. You might want to get ride of the space between the word before the comma just so it looks better but I wouldn't change a single word of it. Nicely done :)

[jex]

Simple and rhythmic. I like how it captures the spirit of Halloween.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This one just sort of moved along the page...I got into the rhythm very quickly, and the imagery came to life. A great piece for "All Hallow's Eve"...nicely done!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of time in the poem. Time can move slow when you are in danger. Nice flow of thoughts in the entertaining poem.
Coyote

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

This is a fun poem for a child on a fun holiday.
Hope you had a Happy Halloween.

[Missy Lorraine]

Definitely a good start. If I were you, which I obviously am not, I would add more descriptive language and take away a few of the tick tocks. But for a last minute thing, it isn't too bad.

[Emerald Seas]

Very fun! It does sound like a nice poem for a cool Halloween evening.

[SlightlyOdd]

The structure was nice, it reminded me of a snippet from a book of children's holiday poems.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I like it jenn- the tick-tocks is a good idea as if counting down when they will arrive , i am
taking your advice and staying indoors ~ and hello to you too )