unbirthdays all round.

oh mad hatter

can't i be your alice?

we can go

into far less mundane worlds

than occupy us now

they're all used up and grey

anyhow

come give me your twirlyeyed assent

we'll build all our writing desks out of ravens

to silence their mocking cackles

and fill our woods with wrens

and wild things

we'll help the boars find truffles

that we'll brew into tea

swirling our words like riddles

until even the sphinx is lost

you'll fashion the gorgeous chapeaux

from which we'll fabricate our home

dwelling in a lost world of our own choosing

kindred besties

lifelong hearts

white knight to this queen's rook 5

Reviews

[Crowley]

"I'm late, I'm late for a very important date" Oh my Robin has this right it is pure magic, the blending of fantasy and desire into a gift with shiny paper and a bow made of the same stuff that souls are made of...no...not marshmallow! You are on some kind of writing binge, I must say, not sure which I like better, part one, or part two...they are both truly amazing. Somewhere a muse is living the good life knowing the job has been done well.

[Adam :P]

huge fan of alice and wonderland,
words are colorful i like this poem. a plus!

[Tony]

Only if I can wear a funny hat.
I like the way you turn words to colors that I can carry around and admire now and then.

"Give me then, your twirlyeyed assent!" said the girl with wrens flying all about.

[Truman S. Booth]

You've successfully combined Lewis Carroll's most infamously insane character with Greek mythology in a poem. Not sure if that's been done before. Congratulations on your entertaining originality.

[Robin]

oh wow, the metaphors and images you create here and how you mixed them is just magical storytelling

that last line, man , pure jennie

[Nobody.]

This mad hatter is in! Just point me to the right rabbit's hole and I'll hop in. ;)

great write! love it!
hell yeah!
Unbirthdays all around!
Tea's on me!