carnation cravings.

for Devons' Picture This group

razor blade hips

dangerously tinged lips

and a shirt cut way down to

there

she captures you

enraptures you

hits you with her james bond

stare

she'll drain you

inflame you

a deer in headlights, lost in the

glare

panic, little rabbit, 

there's no time to run

you're already caught in her

snare

Reviews

[c.m.]

I like this one a lot...the rhyme is nice, and I love how the ending words stick out from the rest.

"razor blade hips
dangerously tinged lips
and a shirt cut way down to
there"

I love that part....genius. I love the razor blade hips line, and if you say lips in a poem or song, I swoon. Very nice piece.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Witchay woman! Full of enticements that does nobody any good, and yet, I want her. For that I give you an A+

[Shante Payne]

This just jumps out at you like the picture and full of energy. A great way to describe this woman that I'm sure has all the guys drooling...and I enjoyed the rhymes, it pieced it all together.

[Crowley]

Dangerous and smoothly sexy, long legs dressed in shiny pleather. Made me sweat a bit...sometimes its good to be a rabbit!

[Devons]

This is quality. It has a real sense of 'cool' and a rock-style rhythm and rhyme that warms nicely to the eye and tongue. Sexy, too, appropriate to the image entirely.
"hits you with her james bond
stare"
...Love that line. Using that suave, casanova-hero to describe the look of a woman really hits the mark. In fact, there really is a touch of 'kiss kiss bang bang' about this poem.
Smart.

[Robin]

seductively lyrical, as I would expect that from a music lover like you