broken syllables.

broken syllables.

A Poem by jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)

a hand emptied
a kiss withdrawn
an embrace unfolded
it was my fault
i should've been satisfied
with the holding
and never asked for more
i'll know better
next time

© 2010 jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)


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This is so sad, feelings are so well expressed.

Posted 14 Years Ago


wow. stark and honest piece. I love that last little bit...really drives the nail in deep. amazing piece as usual.
cheers!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Ouch....does it hurt when I do this.....unbearably sad, I am left doubled over and gasping for air. Harsh and well written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it is difficult when the each heart is listening to a different song .
you are a master of tone ~

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yes one should not be greedy ,a hand touching
a kiss sending you to heavens
or an embrace giving you all warmth and feeling safe
what more could i want..i could easily satisfy with just one..ha ha
lovely write..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)
jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)

Vancouver, BC, Canada



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Playful and eager to explore new styles of writing, and to hone my skills. i'm reaching a point now where i can write a poem and be able to say that it is something i really like. I'm an avid reader, .. more..

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