monsoon moment.

thoughts of you

overflow with joyful abandon

into the curves of my smile

dripping down the twirls of my form

to create the limpid pools

puddling within my every footstep

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

This is a gentle, joyful and definitely a wet poem :)
The way thoughts materialize into the physical, with the allusions to the puddles beneath your feet, makes it seem like the object of your affection is so powerful, that it makes you walk on water. Somewhat of a miracle worker ;)

Well done.

[Moonflower]

This was cool, liquidy enchantment. Beautiful piece, dear.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

So elegant and sinuous. An airy thought and a dewy feeling. I love the contrasting sense of touch it creates in me with it's reference to something dry and something wet. An undulate wisp of satisfaction rises from reading this.

[R J Askew]

Ach, yes, I like this melting. Life at it's whimsical best. All we can do it live it, right?

[Tony]

A fountain of flowing imagery. Outstanding!

[alan peter kelly]

i hear your voice so clearly on this piece jenniewren...it's a keeper...that lingers in a memory...and the theme certainly suits the alliterative title...magic...

[celyn]

beautiful x 10. a lovely, lovely poem.

[Ed Hart]

here, let's put you back together, slowly...isn't this nice

[Crowley]

This is indeed a very wet write....damp, humid, maybe even sultry (said in the throw mama from the train voice). I love where the whirlwind of simplicity meets the driving desire to be together. Great write.

[Robin]

this is beautiful jennie