the still-life of waiting.

i miss you, she said, 

tracing well-used patterns 

into the walls of her mind 

the figment she spoke to 

stayed silent, 

having done so for longer 

than even she could count 

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Profound. Very profound! It is awe inspiring how you can convey so much in so few words, and with such simplicity and clarity. The pain in this write, though huge, is portrayed so subtly, that it feels weightless. Awesome.
100/100, and this is going into my favorites too!

[Robin]

I feel the tension of silence ...

[Emily B]

did anybody say brilliant? I could come back to words like these a thousand times

[miSS LEaf]

it breaks my heart........ just like that, how could your words be so powerful yet gentle? ah i know, silent killers ;)
excellent poem, Jenn :)

[Devons]

A very enigmatic short verse, and it resonates and almost echoes its meaning in a kind of infinite cycle. That is, the "figment" is clearly of the imagination, which, in its seemingly permanent silence, shows the futility of the feelings expressed by the thinker: "I miss you" ....Longing for something that perhaps has never been there. It is a little complex and impossible, but that truly is what feelings are. It reminds me somewhat of Shakespeare's lines: "It's better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all." If you have loved but lost then can you be sure it is better to have done so? And if you have never loved, then how can you know that it would have been better to have done so? A paradox. The human paradox. And that's what this poem definitively represents to me.
Profound work, thought-provoking, with a powerful simplicity.

[Marie Harrison]

Seems like I've been there in this space. A very compelling poem. I really enjoyed it's message.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is amazing. The lines were strong. I could feel the missing and longing for something in your words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[DavidRyanM]

I dig it. I want to steal this. And I still might : ) Well done, darlin.

[Ruth]

This is wonderfully concise and has an impacet:)
Walls that contain memories, nostalgia!
Excellent poem
xx

[Ed Hart]

well, if this isn't a little hurricane