re: stacks.

my chest feels swollen

having soaked up

the sensation of your absence

like a parched sponge

left out to bleach in the sun

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

wow..feels like death is right around the corner.
I've heard that love is not the feeling you get when
you are with someone. It's the feeling you get when
you are apart and you want to see them again.

This poem showed me where that person was coming from.

[Nobody.]

powerful and dramatic imagery. this one hits hard...and leaves a mark.
cheers!

[celyn]

i love bon iver. and i love this poem.

[alan peter kelly]

the swollen chest syndrome...sometimes it burns...

[Robin]

music has relation that shifts as our emotions shift , on to the next

[Crowley]

Super sad...and uncomfortable like being bloated. Never heard this song before, I love it. You so rock. I am really excited about these pieces, the third dimension is tantalizing.

[J.Black]

I love this poem book so far! It's like one poem after another and it keeps getting better and better as I progress along. Very descriptive and vivid.

[Iota]

Your descriptions are right on target to get me to feel the feeling of your write. Missing someone isn't the best of situations but it is nice to have that absence remind you of how much you truly love and miss them. I have this little smile across my face.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

i have not heard the song...but the words are beautiful...very very nice.

[Devons]

Though these are brief words, they hold a sufficient amount of potent imagery that concisely and effectively describe a feeling which is often -if not always- very difficult to identify through words.. and all too often is done so with mawkish emotion peculiar only to the writer.

"like a parched sponge
left out to bleach in the sun"

...These lines portray that feeling with a clinical brutality that is very real and keenly felt... not at all the average "I need you like the sunshine needs the flowers..." bullshit you normally find....