i want to write the words of love.

i want to write the words of love

but my fingers falter at the keys

yet when i pick up 

pen

and book

- the ones i always use

to formulate my thinking -

clumsy nothings are what comes out

i want to write the words of love

but so many before me seem more 

right

than anything my little stumblings offer

so i wait

close my eyes

rain on boat roof patters down

forming puddles in my mind

i wait

a sussuration of 

thumpstutterthump heartbeats

echolocate 

for the place the words spawn from

i wait

i wait

i wait

Reviews

[Gandré]

...here you are addressing the worries of poets in the clearest language possible, the lyrical value is what makes this piece experimental and classical, wondering inward, wishing. The trick was to find out what we know, and then give it a way in language, giving away the doubt - I want to write the words of love - . I like these actions of counting the losses and connecting with experience which is not my alone, but can be a metaphor for everyone.. This reaches beyond self-involvement. I loved this. Many great metaphors.

[R J Askew]

I dunno about words on love, but these two lines are ...
rain on boat roof patters down
forming puddles in my mind
... damn beautiful.

[miSS LEaf]

with or without love, your voice remains sweet and tender, Jen :)
btw i misread echolocate with chocolate, :D
~Lea