Breaking Down

This is one of the first real rock songs I wrote when I first joined my band.

[VERSE:]

 

Can't stop this feeling

My intuition

My sensibility

And my suspicion

Harmless tactility

Dreaded sensation

You're standing next to me

Awaiting my conviction

 

Where do we go from here

When we're no longer in the clear?

 

[CHORUS:]

 

I'm tired of breaking down

Sick and tired of speaking out

Now that you've come around

I'm so glad that I have found

What I've been looking for

Where was this before?

 

[VERSE:]

 

Too late to reach out

Too late to have this

But now that you're in doubt

You're hard to resist

Sometimes you shout too loud

You know I hate it

But when you're down and out

I'm longing for your sweet kiss

 

Where do I go from here?

I'm longing for you, my dear

 

[CHORUS:]

 

I'm tired of breaking down

Sick and tired of speaking out

Now that you've come around

I'm so glad that I have found

What I've been looking for

Where was this before?

 

[CHORUS:]

 

I'm tired of breaking down

Sick and tired of speaking out

Now that you've come around

I'm so glad that I have found

What I've been looking for

Where was this before?

Author's Note

I dunno if you should review this as a poem, since it's really a song.
I guess you should just review it as whatever it speaks to you as! :)

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♥Jen Marks

Reviews

[MDJ]

I like it. For a rock song in this day and age it's much better than most!

[M.K. Jawdat]

Very nice. Enjoyed reading this

[Patches I'm not so new..]

As I said I am no lyricist so it would be grossly unfair for me to say anything other than I lioe it it has a nice lilt to it.

[Chamil3001]

Yes, you are right. this is more like a song. but i really like it.

this is a very good part in the song...
"Where do I go from here?
I'm longing for you, my dear"

i also watched some of your videos in youtube. you have a
great voice. and good talents with the guitar..

keep it up..

[E. A. Fielder]

It reminds me of the relationship I wrote about in Louisville skyline. He always told me I was a "b***h" for telling him how I felt. I love this song and I can connect with it hardcore. What was your inspiration? did you go through a bad relationship too or did one of your friends? good job! Very mature piece.