Dave and Mabel

dull title but I couldn't call it anything else without giving away the end.......................

Dave and Mabel

 

They said "Life passes before one’s eyes

In the final moments before one dies,"

They told a story – declared it was true

The belief of which – I’ll leave to you.

 

Husband Dave --- drank wine from a cup

Putting it mildly, his wife was fed up-

Plain cheesed off with his gambling way

Mabel decided to leave him --- that day

 

The car in which she drove broke down

And was towed by donkey and cart into town

She glanced at her hands and wanted to curse

In her haste to take off, she’d forgotten her purse.

 

Fed up, cheesed off, in a really foul mood

Dave drank his wine and then searched for food

He found Mabel’s purse and said "Good enough,

If that’s what she wants, she can do it damn tough.

 

But Mabel was clever, she went to their bank

And committed a deed some people call rank

She emptied accounts, then laden with cash

Boarded a plane, from the country to dash.

 

Dave’s gambling paid off, he had a large win

Then fed up with ‘friends’ he decided to sin

With step and countenance now rather craven

He chose - Las Vegas - the gambler’s haven.

 

In a storm out at sea, Dave’s ship was soon sunk

And he floated ashore like a pot-bellied drunk

With his feet on dry land, he felt safe at last

Sure in his heart all his problems were past.

 

"Ah! ‘ he thought, "this sure is the life

I’m far away from my damn nagging wife"

Then, the natives crept up - as silent as night-

With a spear at his head, Dave fainted with fright

 

He woke in a sweat --- in water too hot

Up to his neck --- in the native cook pot,

He heard his wife say, "I’m fed up with you!"

She was Cannibal Queen, so he knew it was true.

 

 

©Copyright Jen-JG March 2008

 

Author's Note

all and any comments please. Good - bad - love it - hate it - tell me what you really think. Thanks

Reviews

[PhoeniX]

whow. what a funny tale. not too sure what to say exactly. it was funny. good write. thanks for sharing!

[None]

You made a difficult subject seem so carefree and easy to write. This was very enjoyable with a great rhythm to it. I love it. You are quite the poetess!

[Antony]

Haaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!! Jen this is so funny, great flow with the rhyme and humor.
Antony

[Joseph - Michael]

LMFAO!!! That was so damn funny. I don't see why would you create a title that would give away the ending? You could've used something like this; "Heaven & Hell Hath No Fury Like Mabel Scorned" or something like that? (lol)

Anyway, it's a simple writing, but you gave the great ending, so it's all good...

[Mark Pearce]

This kind of reminds me of lyrics to a ballad --

Like "Frankie and Johnny were lovers."

Colorful ending (he says in unparalleled understatement).

[Nicholas Hallows]

Very fun! And cleverly written too. Nice. NH

[Norma J. Jessee]

I'm still laughing, this was really funny. I loved it.
It was smooth flowing, very nicely written and humorous.
I must thank James for sending this to me.

[James K. Blaylock]

I just adored this fun and... oh so funny piece! It was truly wonderful.

jkb

[Phil Sanders]

Beautifully woven story ... chuckling here .... love it ....