Standing On The brink

Standing On The brink

A Poem by jen -- JG
"

A love song that was, but wasn't meant to be Still searching for the music

"

 

Standing On The Brink

 

Standing on the brink of life

I watch the world go by,

I know that from my love for you

There is no place to hide.

 

I love you without reason

at least none that I can show

.I love you with a passion

strong as the oceans flow.

I love you with a longing,

a need, that just won't go.

I love you with all my heart

but you don't want to know.

 

Just a single smile from you

would ease the pain inside.

I must deny my love for you

and you wonder why I cried.

 

I love you without reason

at least none that I can show.

I love you with a passion

strong as the oceans flow.

I love you with a longing,

a need, that just won't go.

I love you with all my heart

but you don't want to know.

 

Maybe we were lovers once

and now you're just a friend

I know this love I feel for you

will last till my life's end.

 

I love you without reason

at least none that I can show

I love you with a passion

strong as the oceans flow.

I love you with a longing,

a need that just won't go,

I love you with all my heart

but you don't want to know.

 

Yes, I love you will all my heart

but you, don't want to know.

 

ã Copyright JG
 

© 2008 jen

© 2008 jen -- JG


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Wow. A fantastic poem filled with so much love and heartache. It's hard when someone you love either no longer feels the same towards you or never did. Your poem has great flow, rhythm and rhyme. Great job!!!

Josie

Posted 16 Years Ago


I adore this piece ... it is simple and beautiful and flows well. ( I would suggest it would be perfect if you begin it with your six line verse which is the body of the write and then group your three smaller stanzas, and finish it with the repeat you have of your six lines. No need for any more then. ) It's lovely. Best wishes, Bethlynne.

Posted 16 Years Ago


I love those lines "I love you with all my heart, but you don't want to know" ...sometimes when our love is not returned it is true that the object of our affection prefers to turn a blind eye ...pretending they dont know our feelings...perhaps making it worse. very nice flow here...very lyrical.

laura

P.S. thank you for the review and Welcome to the Cafe!

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Added on February 5, 2008

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jen -- JG
jen -- JG

Melbourne, Australia



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I enjoy reading, writing and watching movies. There are two adorable cats in our household who give us much pleasure. i enjoy writing poetry of most kinds, rhyme - open verse - and often anything a.. more..

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