She Stares.

A fashion boutique down this corner,

Women stare in such fluttery wonder,

As he steps foot, this suited man,

Handsome smile, a bouquet in hand,

A lovely smile, she stares with intent,

Oh this man who comes by, again and again,

He has taken her heart bit by bit,

Such a romantic gesture, how intimate,

He stares into this silent woman's eyes,

Not for long, for he passes her by,

He hands the roses to a young clerk,

Standing by the register, everyday at work,

The silent woman's smile can't sway,

Though the pain can never go away,

The man you love has gone to another,

No tears, she can't surrender,

Such sadness, she can never shove,

Oh the poor thing;

A mannequin in-love.

Reviews

[GlacialStars]

o: ghee....golly. We have like a double effect thing going on. You made us think that it was a woman and then you reveal that it was actually a mannequin...An inanimate object that you gave human feelings too. Great personification. But this also can be seen as the opposite! That it's the woman that's immobile and simply gazing, hoping one day that he will come to her and then having her heart broken when its another that gets the flowers but anyway xD Great poem (sorry for babbling, i tend to do that)

[Jem Sagcal]

You don't need to apologize for that HAHA.
Thank you very much for the review!

[Raymond Collado]

very nice

[oxo]

a nice poem. haha. makes me remember a mannequin goin to life. the poem is smooth and has such a cute ending. ph, sometimes, i am like that mannequin. :)

[Jem Sagcal]

Thank you very much for this review. :D
We'll find someone one day that won't put us in the mannequin-zone HAHA.

[oxo]

hahaha. i like that!

[}Echo{]

Interesting... I like this. It's very interesting, and I like the flow of it. Great right. :)

[Jem Sagcal]

Thank you for the review!

I'm just not sure if it's all that good yet haha.

[}Echo{]

Yep.
It's really good. :)