A Sonnet for the Broken-heart.

Hath the beast encircled me,

Green eyes of hatred encrusted thee,

Chaunt the mouth with jealousy,

Be a calm heart, the remedy,

Twisted fate, took sweet love thine,

Unsheathed the lies of Monsieur Valentine,

Left the heart tightly twined,

Hath hatred corrupted thy mind?

Mystery be thy yonder,

Await thy heart to grow fonder,

In time, will hurt be then, surrender,

Whole the heart, which was once asunder,

And thus the story of cupid's arrow be,

The beginning of an ended tragedy.

Reviews

[Tiffany Kelley]

I am absolutely a sucker for Old English words. I wish that they wouldn't have faded over the times as much as they have. Now when I see them written as gracefully as you have here, I fall in love. You did not miss a beat in this poem. Beautiful BEAUTIFUL rhyming, splendid form and fantastic subject. I am looking forward to many more of your writings. I think you may have developed a stalker just now. ;)

[Jem Sagcal]

I love Old English as well, since I have always been a fan of Shakespeare.
Thank you very much for the review!

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Beautiful write. Very easy to relate to with a simple flow. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.

[Jem Sagcal]

Thank you for placing me! And thank you for the review!

[oxo]

wow. haven't read anyone used old english in modern times lately. nice write. im such a classic fan. i like the way you used the words, very creative.

[Jem Sagcal]

Thank you for the review!

I know right. It's kinda sad how people forgot how beautiful old English sounds.

[Sid]

Nicely done, you used old English very well without sounding forced and the subject is very good. You convey the the emotions brilliantly and the rhyming scheme is very well done...great write!!

[Jem Sagcal]

That's such a nice thing to hear. Thank you very much for the review!

[Tex]

A truly remarkable write. This is a gem. You young lady, are a writer! I can't wait to buy your first book. I am sending a read request to a few writers I highly respect.

Amazing, just an amazing write. Keep up the great work.

[Jem Sagcal]

Again, so much thanks for taking the time to read this and for the review. :D I have read some of your writing and it will take me some time to reach your level, good sir.
And I would love for you to send me read requests anytime, since I enjoy your works! :D

[WingsToFly]

Nicely done, beautifully flowing. Loved it.

[Mr.Brik]

I adore this poem. It's so good, it felt smooth. Thank you for sharing

[Sierra D3]

This is really good , and the rhyming is perfect. :)
I really enjoy this Poem.