Veil of Stars

I remember why I started writing these poems.
I was an empty soul with emotions out of control.
I wanted to find the colors of the darkness.

I died and was reborn.

There is so much beauty in the world.
So many secrets to be unfurled
We live under a veil of stars.



I'm only wise because of bad experiences.
Death whispers in multiple appearances.
How tragic most beautiful things are.

I love to watch you chasing dreams.
I cry to see you weighed down by hopeless themes.


There is so much beauty in the world.
So many secrets to be unfurled
We live under a veil of stars.
Close your eyes now, what do you see?

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

Oh my gosh... this explains my passion for writing right down to a T. It makes me feel what I otherwise could not, it helps me figure things out I need to get done. Sometimes, it's like my pen is my soul, and my hand is just a tool to make it work. Beautiful thoughts here, great work :)

[Nyu]

Thank you, and truly your thoughts are also beautiful and warm my heart :)

[Indra Neil]

a profound and deep write! well done!!

[Nyu]

thank you very much :)

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome!

[Broken Serenity]

The poem is beautiful. I think that's the effect poetry has on both writers and readers. I also really love the metaphorical call to action at the end. The picture midway through and the colors really expressed the melancholic serenity of the entire poem. Definitely one of my favorites of your poems. Thanks for sharing!

[Nyu]

thank you so much...:)

[AaronFreitas]

I loved your words Jellycat! I loved the opening lines... reminded me of why I started writing :)

[Nyu]

thank you :)

[Emily]

I love the wording and the story!
Keep it up!!

[Nyu]

thanks so much :3

[Sari Segale]

the positive ""there is so much beauty in the world" and the negative,"how tragic most beautiful things are",love the counterpoint.I close my eyes and I see beauty,love and healing for the earth and us all.....

[Nyu]

wonderful! thank you

[Michael G. Smith]

I love this!! And I remember when i first bean reading your poems last year. You are one of my faves. What do you think if you switched around the second line to rhyme like this? "I was an empty soul with emotions out of control". It retains the exact same meaning yet hanging onto the rhyming scheme. Although, this poem reiterates my understanding of your need to write so elegantly.

[Nyu]

oh thanks yeah i will that works much better! thanks so much

[One Lost Anti-Hero]

When I close my eyes I see a world in which every possibility can change the world in a beautiful or fun way.

[Nyu]

that's awesome!

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!
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When i close my eyes... I see.....nothing aside from the light left inside my eyeball.

[Nyu]

lol little ms literal over here xD