I am good trouble waiting to happen, An explosion of fun buried under old conventions. I rise above only to tell you what your unconscious already knows.
One day you wake up to the sound of the truth and it shakes you.
Jump higher, reach farther, And be ungrounded from this place. Create Change And love will shine through this haze.
You belong to no one but yourself. You have no master, don't believe their lies. You owe them nothing.
One day you wake up to the sound of the truth and it shakes you.
Don't look for me. I am gone. You are here still and breathing. And remember this my friend: Freedom is found only in the mind.
I regret to say I didn't watch the video but I loved this all the same. I interpreted this religiously, because the narrator seems to be rather all knowing and wise such as The Lord. I think I agree with freedom only being found within oneself. In reality one can only be free to such a certain extent and this isn't a bad thing nor is it particularly good. I love the repeated line, 'One day you wake up to the sound of truth and it shakes you'. Something that will be left from this poem inside of me. This left quite the impression on me, thank you for sharing.
Whoa, this is one heck of a powerful poem! From the moment I saw the awesome picture you used for this piece, I had a feeling that it was going to be good. I didn't really just how much of an understated understatement that was though! This poem had a mix of many things; it's inspirational with a little bit of sadness, its subtle at the same time that it is right in your face, and the message is powerful without trying to be more than it is. The font color really works well(it reminds me of steel, strength, those sort of things), and your repetition of the line "One day you wake up to the sound of the truth and it shakes you." is really effective for getting your point across. Also, I like the oxymoron you threw in in the first line with "good trouble"; that literary device is very rarely used, and its nice to see somebody using it. This is a extraordinary piece of writing, in my opinion. :)
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Wow, I haven't heard that much feedback in a while. Yes I agree, and I see my efforts reflected in w.. read moreWow, I haven't heard that much feedback in a while. Yes I agree, and I see my efforts reflected in what you noticed. :) I am so happy to be understood positively. Writing is really rewarding I guess. heehehh
I love the message in this poem. I like that is something everyone needs to know. Such as telling the readers they are there own person that doesn't belong to no one but themselves and that they owe them nothing. I also like the pic above.
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Thank you very much for such an understanding compliment :) it means a lot
Beautiful, I loved the last line because it has so much meaning to it. Great Poem.
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Aw thank you so much! :) And yeah, I had to make a clear choice of where to add that line in because.. read moreAw thank you so much! :) And yeah, I had to make a clear choice of where to add that line in because it kept appearing in my mind the entire time and I had to wait to drop it in just the right spot.
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Yea i do that sometimes with my writing. Its very frustrating, but it rewards well. :D
I used to live here until like you said I woke up to the truth that there's only one master Jesus Chris and now I have found true freedom. Thank you for reminding me of truth through your intelligent poetry.
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Hm... well this life includes no masters not even this Jesus Christ, a man like most master figures .. read moreHm... well this life includes no masters not even this Jesus Christ, a man like most master figures :) I speak here of true freedom from every constraint, including religious. :) But thank you
But having no discipline is not true freedom but certain death.
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I believe everyone creates their own discipline, that these things are developed from an individual'.. read moreI believe everyone creates their own discipline, that these things are developed from an individual's striving for meaning in life.
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I wish that were true but humanity by itself always gives into dires unbridled. This is the side eff.. read moreI wish that were true but humanity by itself always gives into dires unbridled. This is the side effects of freedom to choose. Like water we eventually take the easier path.