Born of one father and separate mothers, we had shared many days of childhood. There were memories where the darkness didn't cover us, When we shone in a happy light.
Now I stand with you; grown and different. Times have changed, Its all apparent. You are older, asking my young mind what to do. You lead me to see what your a victim of. After so much of seeing you weak I said, "I don't know anything."
I used to be so weak; you used to be so strong. Even when I saw so much violence, and heard so much pain, When I chained my spirit with hopelessness, I knew that you could help me see the light of the oculus. Just the sight of your face meant that it was a new day.
Strength is hidden in us both, Even if it falls unconscious it has growth. If you are lost in a negative space, Remember how strong you have gotten from every darkened place.
to tell you the gospel truth
I was lost in the line
trying to figure out such amazing poem
each day poetry gains more fame
now I know how much you have contributed to it
thank you for my soul has found joy in your lines
your more than amazing that's all I can say for now
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
I am very grateful that you think this of my writing. :) I will continue trying to bring unique thin.. read moreI am very grateful that you think this of my writing. :) I will continue trying to bring unique things into the poetry world and the more kind support I get like this the more I feel strong enough to do so.
I like the music and I like your poetry. Filled with real life struggle described with skill. This poem made me fall into deep thoughts and open the door to questions. We learn by the folly of others. Some lessons written deep and hard into skin and heart. Thank you for sharing your amazing poetry. Please send read requests.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Questions are so important, for without them we learn nothing meaningful. Thank you for reading and .. read moreQuestions are so important, for without them we learn nothing meaningful. Thank you for reading and enjoying it. Deep thinking is also so special :)
I love this. I cannot actually relate to this, but through this poem I feel like I somehow can. It is simply amazing, and I truly adored every word of it. Thank you for sharing.
Great write! I really really enjoy reading such unconventional conversational pieces, there's immense sense of mental connectedness between the two characters you've given life here. brilliant structure and flow.. cheers.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much, It means a lot that you consider my work "unconventional" as I hate conventions. .. read moreThank you so much, It means a lot that you consider my work "unconventional" as I hate conventions. I am happy that my work seems to that mental quality. and Cheers!~ ^_^
to tell you the gospel truth
I was lost in the line
trying to figure out such amazing poem
each day poetry gains more fame
now I know how much you have contributed to it
thank you for my soul has found joy in your lines
your more than amazing that's all I can say for now
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
I am very grateful that you think this of my writing. :) I will continue trying to bring unique thin.. read moreI am very grateful that you think this of my writing. :) I will continue trying to bring unique things into the poetry world and the more kind support I get like this the more I feel strong enough to do so.
Love it!!
The music just makes come to life!
Keep it up!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Wow thank you so much. :) I'm really happy that you felt they went together, that is always my goal... read moreWow thank you so much. :) I'm really happy that you felt they went together, that is always my goal.
Oh thank you. And I can't find them, could you point them out? x) maybe I can fix it I hate to look .. read moreOh thank you. And I can't find them, could you point them out? x) maybe I can fix it I hate to look like a middle schooler haha
9 Years Ago
Lol it's cool, I'll send you a revised copy.
9 Years Ago
I saw it when I read it, but when I went to edit it I couldn't find the spelling error, but I correc.. read moreI saw it when I read it, but when I went to edit it I couldn't find the spelling error, but I corrected the punctuation ones. I feel incomplete now lol