Clean is the new Dirty

As it cleans itself, it sees what is outside itself as more dirty.

After cleaning for years and years,

Humanity looks upon its clean world.

But a clean world is a dead world.

Concealed with concrete,

Dirty air, all this war...

What went wrong?

It is a chain that wont break.

It will only melt.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you stated the truth.
"Humanity looks upon its clean world.
But a clean world is a dead world.
Concealed with concrete,
Dirty air, all this war..."
The poem is realistic and powerful. I liked the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nyu]

Thank you for finding some truth in my words, I am always searching to capture it and express it. :) I am so happy to think that it is realistic and powerful to you. It inspires me to keep on creating these silly writes.

[Coyote Poetry]

You made some powerful and true statements. I like your work. Best poetry tell story and can be true. Your poetry is.

[A Glow in the Pit of My..]

Bleach will clean clean clean but it is poisonous, after all. I like the reality of your words, it is true, the more we sanitize and sterilize, the more susceptible we become to a complete collapse - a death of the modern society we have become. Short & succint, with great foresight :)

[Nyu]

Yes I agree perfectly with you. Thank you :D

[Beccy]

I accept that there is a beautiful and artistic side to humankind, but unfortunately, I'm afraid there simply aren't enough artists. Rose coloured specs are all very well, but reality is that our destructive side far too often wins out. As a committed, but I stress, NOT fanatical Christian, I truly believe it is time for direction from a higher hand.

Beccy.

[V. P. Trujillo]

That's one of the great things about you, your awareness and positive messages, while at a young age. By the way, you might want to erase the "the" within the text: "it sees the what is outside itself as more dirty."

[Nyu]

thank you for that it is inspires me and thanks :D so much for catching that

[Beccy]

Seems that what went wrong is that we were genetically programmed to ruin all the beauty around us. Perhaps its time for the second coming.

Beccy.

[Nyu]

oh i don't think so i think everything is pretty and ugly and we simply need to change our way of thinking a bit. a lot of us make beautiful things out of what we see around us, like artists do :) so if everyone became artistic i think we might have a better world.