One

My third post.

-One-

 

Let me be unspoken--in your world,

An absence in each phrase

That you may share.

 

Let me be the least that you can think of

With each breath. And with each breath see

That you were free

Like I always wanted.

 

And I always wanted love,

And truth,

To have

But to never hold:

 

For you are never mine,

But I love you.

And in loving me so--

We are one.

Author's Note

comments very much appreciated.
my third post.

Reviews

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This was as sweet as the sugar that goes on my strawberries! :D I found this wonderful to read; your message is very strong- as I agree with the other reviews. I especially enjoyed the first two stanzas as it set the tone for this lovely write! Thanks and keep up the writing!

[Lilly]

very beautiful - lovely write

[Little Whisper]

Through love not wanting to steal their soul... through this the two souls become one...
"Let me be the least that you can think of with each breath" this line touched me although all of your lines hold true... each line just as touching.

[Lovelysongs]

This is so true about love
good write

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is a very sweet write. (:

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you really have a beautifully phrasing..this is elegant..

[Jillian Alexis]

i love this..its a beautiful write

[Helen Woodward]

Not sure why you aren't confident about this piece, I loved it for the gentle rippling of words across the page and the emotion driven message of love...
Nice work!
Cheers :-)))

[heich]

ahh..so emotional..the words creates melancholic sound..i wanna cry..

[Joanna Maharis]

A very passionate piece with feelings beautifully expressed.

[Loner]

this poem is out of this world .