One

My third post.

-One-

 

Let me be unspoken--in your world,

An absence in each phrase

That you may share.

 

Let me be the least that you can think of

With each breath. And with each breath see

That you were free

Like I always wanted.

 

And I always wanted love,

And truth,

To have

But to never hold:

 

For you are never mine,

But I love you.

And in loving me so--

We are one.

Author's Note

comments very much appreciated.
my third post.

Reviews

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This was as sweet as the sugar that goes on my strawberries! :D I found this wonderful to read; your message is very strong- as I agree with the other reviews. I especially enjoyed the first two stanzas as it set the tone for this lovely write! Thanks and keep up the writing!

[RTB]

that was a good way of showing love original and overall fantastic i liked how u ended it as in loveing me so we are one that was awsome good job :)

[Tahna]

ahh, your amazing :-)
Lovely Lovely Lovely

[Jessica]

This is simply beautiful. My favorite stanza is the second to last, it just strikes me. This is surely going on my favorites list. Great job!

[Taylor H.]

This is a beautiful poem! I loved it

[deeps]

This is so wonderful,
It's beautiful and so carefree.
Well written

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Great design and style..Enjoyed reading it very much..Sunflower

[Nicole Clarice Anna Wie..]

Another great write - wow you have some talent with the written word. Always so bitter sweet, but that's life I guess (well in my experience anyways). I enjoyed this one. Keep writing... please.
Cheers - N.C.A.W.

[Joshua Donahue]

this excellent writing! although you could increase the size a little bit since it uses a special font and can be a little hard to read at times. but your writing is excellent. great job!

[The Fatal Lover]

Wow. That was great and it flowed together wonderfully. I loved it. Great job. =)

[Tina Kline]

This is very beautiful. Loving is not owning but loving and being loved. Very tender and romantic.