Endless

My first post.

-Endless-

 

I have longed for love
But I never lack.
Perhaps an ounce of you
Way back when I was yours
Seemed enough
To show such affection
Until now--
Not lessened
And have endured-
A mark of rain’s abundance:

 

The withered leaves
Outlived the weeds around,
That I may brag for another day,
Another month,
Another year,
And though I fear,
Be it a lifetime
That I have loved,
And will always love
Until this heart speaks no more:

 

For it was dust,
Waiting for your breath...
...to have it carried.

Author's Note

comments very much appreciated.
my first post.

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

Oh, I get it now.. You have your own was of writing your poems in your own forms (Dumb me :P). I liked the lines

"Until now--
Not lessened
And have endured:
A mark of rain’s abundance"

Such flow in your words, like silk and wool. You've said this is your first post. But, is this your first poem? (I'm not bonkers, read it again :D :P) Because if this is really your first poem, I should be damned; I could never write such a nice first poem.

Kudos. Keep writing.

[Lovelysongs]

I thought this poem was quite powerful
Great job

[Scott Kelly]

Not sure what this is saying, though it is nice. But.. what is the substance of the poem? That you long for a girl, and she isn't there? Is that the entirety of the message?

[Tina Kline]

Very descriptive, full of emotions of love yet with a touch of sadness, at least I think there is in this, over all it makes for a very very beautiful poem that does flow so very nicely. And that makes it a joy to read as well.

[Onyx_Rayne]

What a beautiful write. The emotions are intense and heartfelt.
"The withered leaves
Outlived the weeds around,
That I may brag for another day,"
I love that. Talent has not escaped you..keep 'em coming ;)

[heich]

love it..everything about it..

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"For it was dust,
Waiting for your breath...
...to have it carried."

{NICE!!!--this a really uniquely creative poem}

a very beautiful write----I Love It!!

james:-)

[Natalie]

This is an amazing poem. I really love. It' flows very nicely. I also love you poem insomnia and can relate because I struggle with the same thing. :)

[Lightfalls]

Wow I like this very much. It's so sad, but really beautiful, it seems to show how the heart is willing to wait forever, till the end of time, because it's life, or death, is made from love. Great write!

[Leanne Conway]

Loved it!