Untitled

You came into my life and you made me feel

Beautiful

Wanted

And loved.

I loved waking up in the middle of the night and feel you next to me.

I loved the way you could be so open to me about everything in your life.

I loved the way you always smelt of coffee and cigarettes.

 

You made me feel so alive,

Like no other girl in the world mattered.

I never wanted this to end.

 

But it did,

And so did I.

Reviews

[Steve]

I read through this poem noting the focus upon imparting experience and emotion. At the second stanza I got an ominous feeling that things were about to change. The third stanza stunned me. It blasted me with the emotion that the first two stanzas had set up. Then I spent many minutes pondering how I might interpret, "And so did I." Eventually I settled upon the notion that the 'you' that existed during this relationship could not exist as it was once the relationship had ended. This of course, I reasoned, was because our relationships define us, therefore ending one changes us or 'ends us' in the most intimate of ways. Now I sit at me keyboard wondering how close I came in my estimation. Furthermore, it was the title, 'Untitled' that caught my eye. Thank you for sharing.

[Emmy]

I feel the same way right now. I had my heart broken not to long ago, and I realized writing helps. I wrote a poem just for the one who cheated on me, now I just have to read it too him...:p nice poem! I love the way it is worded!